I thought it was a great reply to the shepard. It was a unique let down towards him. The flow was off in a few parts but it was still an easy read. I also thought that alot the rhyming didnt work, or that you rhymed in some areas then some not in some. But i still loved it and i think it deserves a 5/5
Wow i LOVED this piece, the way you described the traping and the wooing of the heart was very much realistic. and that you could talk and write a response to one poem that another person had written, and be it that you may not have even been inspired by said poem, and make it so much your own. I could see all te visuals as you were giving them as well.
my favorite lines were:
But so much land means too much work,
And all that time you're just not worth.
You offer me those sparkling diamonds,
So what is that you hide behind them?
You try woe me with all your treasures,
Why not with more loving measures ?
there wa sonly one thing that i spotted that I thought could be improved it was in these lines: I'm not that young or that naive;
Your trap just don't appeal to me << i thought it could be better worded by saying Doesn't
Sensational!!! I actually posted my previous comment to you before I read this, but your part of the poem reinforces what I was referring to. Still, I appreciate the verbiage and the impact behind your prose. You're rebuttal was glorious! You got my 5!
Wow. this was trully amazing. i love this reply. i love how you rhyme and how this flows. this is my favorite of the three that i have read. ur a great writer and it standss out dont let anyone take this from you. great job.
I loved how unique this was. Its so different to wha i normally read. And seriously, you have talent. Every poem of yours that i have read so far i have LOVED! lol. It flows so...perfectly and the rhyme scheme was great, your choice of wording was once again, well picked. I really have nothing bad to say about this wonderful write. I really loved reading it. =) 5/5