Between The Shadows

This was a very long poem, but I couldnt help but fall in love with the emotion. You did a better job with the flow in this one. Also, I loved how you actually incorporated the title into the poem's ending. Brilliant and beautifull write.

5

--Kay Jay

Today I am in the mood to read all love poems for some reason, so I looked around on your profile and found this beauty!

"Between the shadows
rest a place where I find
you always. Here and there
no matter the day, I know you'll
be everywhere. Darkness is not
always the root of evil, seed of
sin. The place I met love,
the place where we begin."

A good introduction, telling the reader about this piece and bringing your feelings into clear view.

"Behind the sun
Lies the thoughts of you,
my dearest love that feels so true.
Trickling down the faucet is
the time I spent in this solitary
mind shaft waiting for your return.
My sweet I'm happy you've come back."

This flowed like a love song but the only thing that I was hesitant about when reading was this "My sweet" , I just didn't like that adjective playing as a noun there, it seemed like you should have said "sweet one". But that is my opinion, it is your poem :)

"Next to mountain tops
is where I slept in your arms.
Nearly close to heaven where
I felt no kind of harm.
I'm blessed through you my
angel. Your wings of faith
cover me and fuel my great escape."

Wow, this is just what I was thinking about. I absolutely love the mountains and their beauty and going there with your love sounds like the best thing in the world. I just might write about that, thanks for inspiring me!

I also love the mention of him being your angel, that never gets old to me, I always smile when I read heartfelt words like these, they are just so touching.

"Near riverbanks
stands the first viewing of
the light shinning off your brown hair.
Perfectly sketched in my memory
erase such a picture, I'd never dare.
Years with you have made me see
the greatest parts of life
aren't always a mystery."

How unified you both are, and it shows with the words you have woven together.

"Over the half moon
stares a pair of eyes
I'd know in the darkest room.
I've been hurt too much and
you're love didn't come too soon.
You make me feel different
like I could laugh through the hurt.
You're the best thing in the universe
the one I deserve."

I like your confidence in this piece, I know a friend who loves her significant other so much but feels that she is not worthy and that his life is more important. Where here, you live together equally and value each other's company..

"Opposite green plains
stays the moments I share with you,
the love I feel, the heart that beats,
the you and me. Even with
death around the corner, I'll never let go.
Just remember, love, that we have
our sacred place hidden
between the shadows."

Great repetition of that line "between the shadows", that is powerful and striking because it seems sometimes the shadows will consume us and there is no light.

A thoughtful and inspiring piece, thanks for the read!

God bless you and Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!

~MaryAnne

"Next to mountain tops
is where I slept in your arms.
Nearly close to heaven where
I felt no kind of harm.
I'm blessed through you my
angel. Your wings of faith
cover me and fuel my great escape."

i love that you did amazing job.

5.5

*was peaceful :)

I love the scenery you painted for the readers.
this poem wast peaceful, more than anything.
its nice to know that between the shadows there's also something peaceful, something beautiful. that love can be found anywhere.
i loved this 5/5

-Liz