Beauty of the Rainbow

by Lu   Jan 25, 2010


Beauty of the Rainbow

Dearest, how I yearn
to exist within the unwrapped
folds of your heart.
Explore every crevice and feel -
every fragile thought that bleeds.
Ride with you - together-
through tumultuous waves of memories
that immerse your spirit
in salty waters.

Oh how I ache for the passionate kiss
of your unspoken words.
To breathe ..
the breath of your breath.
To cry ...
the tears of your tears.

Lastly Dearest !
To love - hand in hand
beneath a blanket of cloudy skies
and a half - filled cup of sunshine.
And - together- unfold
the beauty ...
of the rainbow.

Quote R.T.V.W Club challenge
Special Thanks to Nee Nee (Nema)

Quotation: "The most important thing in life is to learn how to give out love, and to let it come in" Morrie Schwartz

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  • 13 years ago

    by Deana

    I have missed reading your beautiful poetry. This is romantic and very classy! awesome!

  • 13 years ago

    by Lesbian Natalie

    This is an awesome poem...I wish I could write as well as you do, hun!!!! Perfect flow of your poem....5/5....

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Beauty of the Rainbow

    Dearest, how I yearn
    to exist within the unwrapped
    folds of your heart.

    >>>AWw a veryyyy very romantic stanza..
    I loved the word exist within the unwrapped
    folds..u could have said in ur heart..easier for u..but
    it would be not one bit amazing..as much as the way
    u worded it.. unique!

    Explore every crevice and feel -
    every fragile thought that bleeds.
    Ride with you - together-
    through tumultuous waves of memories
    that immerse your spirit
    in salty waters.
    ^this stanza is powerful, meaningful
    and romantic.
    I love the usage of each vocab.

    Oh how I ache for the passionate kiss
    of your unspoken words.
    To breathe ..
    the breath of your breath.
    To cry ...
    the tears of your tears.
    >>the repetition is too emotional..too possesive
    and really really passionate..I can't remember
    I have felt emotions in any piece b4, as much
    as in this one!

    Lastly Dearest !
    To love - hand in hand ( SWEET)
    beneath a blanket of cloudy skies
    and a half - filled cup of sunshine.( AWWWW i love i love this line..reminds me of my poem..and of myself sure:P )..cup filled with
    And - together- unfold
    the beauty ...
    of the rainbow.
    ^^Perfect ending and very poetic.. the more
    am reading ur work..the more am loving it!
    Thought provoking and inspiring..

  • 13 years ago

    by AJ

    Lu, if this were any good it would have a 5/5 and a front page win.. wait.. this must be pretty good then XD

    I loved it, very good transitions and pauses.. it flows so well, like a rainbow. I don't know how I missed this contest, looks like it was fun...

    "Double rainbow all the way across the sky.." - If you don't know what that is then google it, it will make your day.. but make sure you get the original video, not the song haha

  • 14 years ago

    by Ixora

    Simply beautiful. From the imagery to emotion. The poem has great structure. Wonderful job!