I Am

My first stanza was certainly the favorite.. Allot of emotions in here... U did a great job sins its so hard to write about one self.

Such a powerful piece you've penned here Jen. Loved the sarcastic tone of this piece ended with a positivity. Great stuff as always!

"I'm skillful
At starving my senses
Numbing my heart
Silencing my mind"
^This really stood out to me as a strong stanza - I love how you incorporated the senses into your lines!

"I'm beautiful
When all around me seems ugly
Here strength is born
What could be more beautiful?"
^A nice ending, I loved the question at the end! Questions always provoke thoughts for the reader. I also thought the ending stanza was brilliant because it brought a lot of optimism into the piece. Awesome job.

First off I will tell you already that you did a great job with this poem. I liked the words you used which kept the flow even throughout the poem.

I'm great
At finding fault within myself
Not forgiving
Or allowing myself to live
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An interesting start for you poem. Shows that the writer is sorrowful it seems in this aspect.

I'm good
At letting others come first
Wanting to fix what hurts them
Needing to leave myself behind
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Another good line as you once again put yourself on the back burner and try and help those around you. Don't know if I like the last line though. It doesn't really seem to go with the stanza, but I might just not be interpreting it right.

I'm angelic
When the lights go out
The torment in my eyes is gone
None can see me
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A interesting view of oneself and you have made it seem as you are suited in darkness sense that is when you are angelic. Overall a good line.

I'm skillful
At starving my senses
Numbing my heart
Silencing my mind
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This was a very creative line I thought. You gave great ways at what you can do and a bit of sadness in each of those things.

I'm beautiful
When all around me seems ugly
Here strength is born
What could be more beautiful?
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And a ending that makes the reader think about what is being interpreted here. It's true we get strength in time of need and when we need it most.

So overall on the entire poem a wonderful job. I just wanted to show how I felt about each line.I mean nothing bad about anything I said, I just said what I thought about each line. The ideas were all great as well. Good job and keep writing.