Blandswood

by Nicko   Sep 23, 2010


Hovering featherless over Blandswood
Pere Punga
My sacred childhood

Played out in vibrant hue
Earthy tones, blunt of stone
Kaleidoscope of green and blue

Indescribable passion of smells
lungs full of natures essence
A closing window into scenes begone

Scuttling through undergrowth of tripping root
Never panting, youths abandon
Playing
Huckleberry Finn

Scrambling over slippery moss
Totara, kowhai, Punga
Monsters to a newborn
My fortress in the bush

Hovering featherless over Blandswood
Now grey at the roots
I saw a flicker running through the bush
Green it was and very fast
Just like my youth

(And yes begone is not a word, but it fits here, maybe for me alone.)

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  • 13 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Aw, oh I loved this:)

    I used to be a Tomboy and was never home. And we always played the Dutch version of Hucleberrry Finn, ha ha. Me, my brother and our best friend Sven, we were the Three Musqeteers, ha ha ha. It was our way of escaping a bad situation at home and I can truly say all good memories I have of my childhood, are those I made outside, playing with my friends.

    Indescribable passion of smells
    lungs full of natures essence
    A closing window into scenes begone

    ^^
    I understand why you used begone, but also "scenes in sepia"would do nicely here.

    Thanks for the trip down Memory Lane, Nick:)

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    :) no makes sense for me too!
    I just love the uniqueness of your poetry!
    it is nothing like common...the wording is always special..and u have an undefinable style !

    The coherence in ur words is incredible and the creativity is touchable..If i was you i would do anything but giving up on poetry!

    write evn wen u dnt have ink!
    5/5 SURe for a poem like this

  • 13 years ago

    by Jess

    Ahw, I Adored This Poem.
    You Have Some Great Talent, I Envy It.
    Make's My Poems Look Rubish:P Haha.
    I Love your Style Of Writing, And How you Just Say All That you Need To Say.
    And Also A Very Nice Flow=D
    5/5
    Can You Comment And Rate One Of My Poems Too? That Would Be Great!
    Much Love, Jessi<3

  • 13 years ago

    by TSI25

    I really enjoyed reading this one, it was a pretty good example of free verse. one thing that bothered me just a tiny bit was the repetitive use of "youth" outside of any kind of discernable pattern, i think it was used 3 times throughout the poem butreally im just being nitpicky, honeslty it was very good.

  • 13 years ago

    by trippetta TC

    Ah Ha! So what do Totara, kowhai mean?