Tornado

WOW...your opening stanza really really drew me in.. This feeling is one A LOT of us can relate to. It sucks when you feel like 1, you have a tornado of emotions swirling inside of you, or 2, someone is like a tornado pulling you in and suffocating you. Both feelings are terrible and really hard to go through.

Your ending was awesome! I really like the analogy you used and your word choice was great!

Keep it up I love your work!

Sowy:( for being late..
anyway though you already knew my opinion few days ago..

but here we go ;
an amazing piece, a poem that's written with so much power.
Greatly penned Miss :),
I love your expressions, how nothing is cliche...

I think what I loved more, was how you only revealed the 2nd part when you penned down the last or ending parts, that left a very good impact.

PS: the way your whole emotions stand bare with clarity yet poetic way..

the only thing i would suggest, is..noo actually are 2 minor things :

1) don't capitalize each single 1st letter of each new line, i think this happened because you wrote using microsoft?
anyway it kills the flow better..or else each new line..sounds like a new idea . got me ? :)

2)if u repuncuate the last part this way, would be a bit easier :

Coughing, gasping for breath
polluted air engulfs me,
the swift movement grows faster,
pushes harder and breaks me.

You're a destructive force of nature
pulling me into your fatal vortex,
losing consciousness I surrender;
- vanished in your vicious tornado.

five for sure, :)
well done, keep shining