Quicksand

I am a fan of sad poems, your title is very catchy!
And i love the theme of this one, i love the emotions, and the complex of your pessimism, in this piece, i believe u better write some letters with uppercase and add some punctuation, and so if u dnt mind, this is my suggestion : read, compare, if they make sense, then gd :)

but 5/5 as it is :]

these would be my suggestions :

The battle was won but I am numb
logs bleed in the river,
as I suffer this disaster.
The dust blows at my feet
I cannot move from defeat
the moon shines upon my face
I am not proud.
For the people I've killed
I sink in the pit of quicksand they create,
for I fear the screaming will not escape
but still I feel your kiss, only.
that awake s me on the seashores of hope
and therefor you become the cure for my poison.

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compare them and choose, nothing much, just few changes that would make a better flow :)