In My Dreams

Wow!!! that just blew my mind amazing talent you have keep it up :)

This is amazing! Emotion is your star, and it shines so bright. Description, detail, and imagery are all beautifully intergrated into this fabulous piece.

I'm going crazy as I wait for your call,
Hoping you'll care, if you think of me at all.
My agonizing days turn to dreaded nights,
As I fear what I'll see behind my eyes.

^^ Such a strong way to begin, and kind of captivating.

In my dreams lie a world where I go at night,
Where the world seems perfect, and we are alright.
We walk down the ocean, hand in hand,
Enjoying every memory we make in the sand.

^^ This is some of that imagery, but really it just leads up to the next few stanzas.

And when night starts to fall, you hold me near,
And whisper sweet nothings in my ear.
We share tender kisses and love through the night,
Wishing we could delay dawn's early light.

^^^ This is a ton of imagery, beautiful descriptions.

But as morning nears, my dream comes to a halt,
I open my eyes, and realize I'm at fault.
For the moment we shared were nothing but a dream,
And I slowly feel myself slipping at the seams

^^^ This is my favorite stanza in your piece. It is just so full of emotion, longing, and it really adds a lot to the piece.

Each day that I wait for your name to light my phone,
My world turns that much colder, and I feel even more alone.
Because deep in my heart, I know how you feel,
Your love for me... Will never be real.

^^A PERFECT ending!! It is so strong, and ties it all together, and oh it is just amazing.

Your piece really flows well. And the length is very nice. I think that this is worthy of a 5/5. I really enjoyed reading this. Great job! Keep it up!