Cut (contest)

by Brittany C   Sep 19, 2011


I'm cut;
deep inside.
My life blood
is flowing out.

Cut;
it's when
I feel relief,
I can breathe.

Pain;
is strong.
Numbness,
it is finally gone.

I just want
to feel what
you feel; emotions,
other than this sadness.

But I don't;
I wait for it here
and I search for it there
but try as I might it eludes me.

Cutting;
releases the
pent up things
I can't get out myself.

Warm;
my blood drips
to the wood floor
where I sit by myself.

Consumed
by the shadows.
Feeling lost to the world
I don't want to die, I just want to feel.

I want
love in my life;
It's been missing
for far too long, forever.

But
I am hopeless.
Unable to open up
and trust I cannot give.

Alone; I will stay
for who would want
to be with with me, loner.
With so many scares seen; unseen?

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  • 12 years ago

    by Faithless Watermelon

    This was more imaginative than the other poem of yours that I read. I appreciate and respect your ability to create very short lines and stanzas but still get your point across. Personally though I prefer a little longer and descriptive poems, which I also think you have the potential and ability to create. I haven't read much of your poetry but if there's a wordier one that you have, let me know, I'd love to see it. I'm also too lazy to look for it myself, sorry :P

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni

    I have to agree with the comments above. I think this poem flows really well and the emotions are strong. Though this poem was filled with sadness I really enjoyed reading it.

  • 12 years ago

    by sweet escape

    You're words, though simple, were powerful. As a past cutter, I know the feeling and could relate. Memories flooded back for me, but I have the love the poem was searching for. :D

    I think the flow was very good and the placement of the pauses aided in the reading.

    You are very talented. Keep up the good work. 5

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    ^^I agree with my little sweet Connie, that the flow was nice and that's what I loved about the poem the most. :)

    Your sad poems always leave an impression on me. Britt...good write! ;)

  • 12 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    The poem flowed nicely, deep and emotional meaning penned in this write. The theme took my breath as sadness took over
    well done

    Connie