Penny on the Road

Reading this again gives me goosebumps

SO inspiring! and full of hope.

god bles su

"..a coin of hope between his fingers.."

a most poetically picturesque phrase..thanks for sharing this with us, ms sunshine.

Sincerely,
Rom

The days were early
for the chaos it seized,
and though waking up
felt like riding an old train
that needs construction,
but still I "unnoticed" the
blast of noise and confusion
around me.

^^^

You need to change the word ''it' in the second line to 'they' because you say days in line one which is plural.

Trying to reach you, I lost
a penny each single day
on the road, however
not that I cared about
the money I've lost but
I still wonder how I've
reached poverty that soon.

^^^^

I think you should chop Í've lost'in line five. It's not really necessary and, you have used I lost in line one.

I festered in the sun, lost
on daily basis unable to
reach the unknown,
though all the places I've
passed by were anonymous.

^^^

Once again..lost is not necessary in line one I feel, I think by removing it it will add strength to the word festered.

Now laying here deprived
on the streets that I can
doubtlessly call home, I search
for the last coinage, questioning
if you'd ever understand the
meaning in my poetry,
the pain I cannot defeat...
because I have nothing left
now, except for the road.

And that man standing
on the corner, holding
a coin of hope between
his fingers.

I'm not sure if these last two stanzas are a continuation but, as you have a period after road I think not. The last stanza had me guessing...is this person someone you have been searching for throughout the verse or is he a sort of saviour figure?

A very intriguing poem from you as always and....these are just small suggestions for you to consider.

This is a beautiful piece, well written and very descriptive. I love it because although you can read the meaining in it, it is vague enough to take on new meaning for different readers.

This is the first poem I am reading on the website, and it has blown me away! I am not much of a writer, but this piece just blew me away! Its great to see amazing talent in flow here! Thumbs up!