Black Bird

I love the title. I love how you made it so descriptive , felt like I was actually there while reading it. I love how it's a dark poem. therefor I think the poem is very good :)

"Walking along a forest path not yet wearily
I think I'm sure I know this path, my
footfalls eerily. What's clear
to hear but still unseen. Hidden in high and
lofty tree. A lonely cry thru
quaking leaves floating in golden sea
Black bird, black bird, do you caw for me?"
The beginning is very out there and kind of dark I like it.

"Laughter fills this leafy path, this forest I
surely know. I fear, I fear, I fear
the call. Do you hear the crow? I pick my
pace to fight the grasps of the crisp and early fall.
This forest path the laughter still. Black bird, black bird,
please don't raise your call."
The imagery is so vivid right here its outstanding. Its almost like a old mans tale that little kids would be scared of.

"This familiar worn path in these familiar woods
it's a place I don't recall.
My path is weary and confused,
my mind feeble and flawed.
black bird, black bird. caw. caw. caw."
This ending went so well and brought it all together, the poem was dark and I loved how you made the reader feel in this.

Love this piece, an excellent work done:=)
keep writing",

Wow awesme i love dark poems but m nt able to write, let see when i'll write. but dis poem inspired me 5/5 good job

Wow i absolutly loved it amazing job! 5/5 from me and if u need to talk im here :))