The ending really struck a chord in me- I loved how you made such colorful and intricate examples of the eye and going beyond what I would have ever observed, it brought a lot of images in my mind, and wanting to understand that depth too. Really uniquely written with character- your love and admiration for eyes is brilliant and illuminates this whole piece is a fresh way.
"glowing with the beauty of perfect identity."
I like how you brought together these words in this first stanza......excellent choice and I can't say anything else but it was thought-provoking and beautiful. Eyes that hold our identity :)
11 years ago
This piece seemed odd at first but after the first couple lines it began to make sense. There is a lot of amazing description as well as a great word choice. Excellent piece.