A very sad poem that bares open unvarnished emotions out in the open. Using the symbolism of various fruits to metaphorically project a fast bruising relationship. Lemons, to depict bitterness and sourness; and fallen apple to denote the break up in love, which was once held in high esteem....lips that tasted like strawberries, was unique. The intensity of hurt in this souring relationship is projected using "a thousand knives piercing through an open wound." The picture of how easily love can be metamorphosed or destroyed when not nurtured tenderly by the gardener, who tends to his garden, is very well painted here. So in my opinion this is a deserving winner, as it so well projects the anguish and despair, in a woman hurt from the callousness of her lover. The ending is the most heartfelt of all:
I challenge -
your scrutiny to see beyond the possibility
that I may in fact
be more than just a fallen apple from a tree
for now I will take off my mask -
though your distorted view will still leave me
where I've always been -
Superb job, Lioness, in penning darkness of our heart, so well.
I fell inlove with this when I first started reading it in the club's congrats thread. To me it had just the right mixture of emotions, powerfulness and images. I loved how there was some kind of music to the words, as in the very soft rhymes and ofcourse the double meaning in the poem. A very creative write. Keep it up!