SHE said......

That I will always be the one,
but that was a lie in every state
my world seems to be crumbling
by the roar of these tectonic plates

-In the first place, you're first stanza explained clearly what was the emotion of the persona here. I can visualized you're feeling while writing this piece. I like the way you contemplate "tectonic plates". Nice introduction.

SHE said it will be like a scene
from a movie, I guess now I won't
find out what happens at the
end of this trilogy like a melody
my eyes are imperilled
to black and white, the night
we spent at the weekend
you are now not seeking

-The feeling here flows deep...and I like the way you used a about the scenes in movie.

I feel like a fool,
SHE said I'll take care of you,
if you loved me
you wouldn't have forgotten
we had a life to begin,
in the end it was ruined as
love was not made for me
to feel forever

-And the last part supported the whole piece. It so touchy and very emotional. I was touch by the last part. I really enjoy reading. Keep writing.
God bless:))

It hurts to be lied to
To be let down..I know the feeling it really hurts

I loved the read(:
5/5(:

Thx, but i have never been hurt as i have never had a girlfriend or fall in love before, this poem was to show how i would feel if she did hurt me

I know how it is to be hurt. I get let down all the time. But one day u will find a girl that won't hurt u. Like I will find my Guy. I just stopped looking and hopefully he will pop up out of no where.

Thanks for your comments its really appreciated, everything I write is not pre-written its more or less free style and from there I update my poems when I have a better phrase or stanza to make it sound more approachable