Comments : If Cigarettes Could Talk

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    If cigarettes could talk... I guess they would bit**-laugh at smokers.

    I question, how long
    would it take before
    your thoughts are
    exposed, and the
    betrayal sinks in
    to someone else's
    lips from their
    blaze?

    ^ Beautiful piece, portraying reality... Thanks Liz for bringing this crisis forward through your beautiful poetry.

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Liz, Just when I am turning in for the night, you post this piece and get me thinking all over again...
    That's what I love so much about your poems, they are full of pondering thoughts, not to mention such striking imagery and intense emotion...

    I like this piece mainly for it's message for I am against smoking and this is one of those subjects that gets touchy but is a strong one and a very important one

    Love always Liz
    You rock
    xxxxx

  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I think this poem should be placed on all ciggy packs :-) Well written poem... love it Liz... I'm a smoker and now I feel like my lungs are applauding you for this awesome poem...

  • 12 years ago

    by victor dyck

    Itsgoodtoexpressyoourfeelingsaboutsomelifelessbutwhoknowsihaveofttrnwonderedaboutthid

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    I hate the smoke and I just dont smoke.
    So this poem caught my attention. I was curious to see what it was in it.

    And I would definitively don't trust it.

    Edit: I wouldnt trust the cigaret.

  • 12 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    I loved everything about this. When i read this, i was thinking what if that cigarette i smoke every friday really spilt every little secret of mine and i concluded that i wouldnt trust the lil guy no matter what.

  • 12 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    I don't like smoking or some smokes, but you touch something in me with this poem.
    You made med wonder about a lot, that is good

    Love it

    Br
    Ole

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Lol I agree with Abed:)

    U sent the msg to the readers in a really great way:)
    Perfectly written poem, I love it:)

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Well written and real ..Smoking stinks haha

    Good message for all

  • 12 years ago

    by Karla

    I hate the smoke and I don't smoke either. Loved your poem.

  • 12 years ago

    by Ronel McCarthy

    I love the imagery .......charcoal breath........minds of a chimney.......sensory words to bring the message across -the poet's dislike for smoking ..............and the deeper level-the things we do and why we do it.

  • 12 years ago

    by tainted melody

    The title really cought my eye. I have never heard anything like this poem and i thought it was very original and sent a great message. We can't let something as harmful as that, control our life :) I would love it if you could check out some of my new writes. I would love to hear what u think :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Congrats on the win :)

    Soooo deserved it!

  • 12 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    I LOVED READING THIS, everytime I see someone smoke I feel a dagger run through me, hearing someone think of the damage it does other then me is a dear thing, I WISH THEY WERE BAND!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    I LOVED THIS POEM, ONE OF MY ALL TIME FAVORITES, I HATE SEEING PEOPLE SMOKE AND IT KILLS ME INSIDE EVERYWHERE I GO, EVERYTIME I SEE A CIGARETTE WITH SOMEONE I FEEL A DAGGER RUN THROUGH ME, IT'S NICE TO KNOW OTHER PEOPLE ARE AWARE OF IT'S DAMAGE, AMAZING POEM.
    I WISH THEY WERE BAND
    !!!

  • 12 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    I LOVED THIS POEM, EASILY BECAME ONE OF MY FAVORITE, FOR SURE, IT'S NICE TO KNOW SOME OTHER PEOPLE KNOW OF DAMAGE SMOKING DOES, AND CARES, AMAZING POEM, I WISH SMOKING WAS BAND!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Sunshine

    The title is really appealing and I liked how you didn't put a question mark after it because at first glance it seems like a question but I like it more as a statement. Your poem was nicely drizzled with alliteration that didn't overpower the message. It was just right. My favorite part of this poem was the structure. It sets up a nice pace and rhythm when reading it which adds to the overall joy of reading. Your word choice was exquisite because it related to smoking but was weaved in a poetic manner into the piece. It made for some nice imagery throughout the poem. I also liked your use of personification like "minds of a chimney" because it added a more relatable atmosphere to your words. Overall this was a wonderful piece that had me thinking of what cigarettes would say about the people smoking them for they do hold many secrets.

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    Tie Breaker's comment, will be added as soon as it's received.

  • 12 years ago

    by Darukh

    You not only explained the effects of cigarette but also touched upon the reasons why people smoke
    great work b

  • 11 years ago

    by nouriguess

    For all those who smoke:

    IF YOU DON'T CARE ABOUT YOURSELVES, THEN GO AHEAD AND SMOKE BUT AWAY FROM US! BECAUSE WE WANT TO LIVE IN GOOD HEALTH! AND OH HOW AWESOME IT WOULD BE IF YOU ALL GATHER AND DWELL IN A WORLD OF YOUR OWN! GOOOOOOSH.

    Sorry, had to say this. My ex-boyfriend used to smoke tons of cigarettes a day and I was sick of it. I tried so hard to let him quit smoking but all in vain! Anyway, I wish him all the best now, hahaha. I truly like your poem, I found it original and new! Keep writing, lovely.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Great message, love it.
    your a very talented writer!