The Haunting

I liked how u wrote this poem, and how made the reader just get in to it, and relate to in many different ways:)
Great poem liz, I love it:)

"Can you feel
the goose bumps
invade your body"

Yes, I felt it!This is a great poem!
It's tone is stange and cold ,but magicaly...

Steven

Great techniques used-assonance and similes are powerful. This is beautiful ! :)

The howling
sounds that emit
from the distance
which seems to be
getting closer
with every thump
of your heart.

^ I suggest you make it this way: The howling from a distance seems to get closer with every thump of your heart. (I think this way, the flow wouldn't be killed in this stanza specifically).

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So let's now dissect your goosebump-ing piece!

The Haunting

^ you know, this what caught my sight first. I mean... such titles with their obscurity can be really magnetizing.

Taunting, isn't it?

^ I like when poets start their poems with questions. They make me yearn madly to continue, and especially that taunting rhymes with haunting, I was allured more.

Being unaided in
the darkest hour
while unknown
voices screech
from the walls
that bleed
red poison.

^ I can sense from the opening that it's about OCD... "unknown voices screech from the walls" .. as if you're saying the voices haunt you. And comparing the poison to being red sets a dense image in my head.. spooky!

Like nails
on a blackboard.

^ I think this is my favorite part!! but shouldn't the preposition be 'against' instead of 'on'?

Do you notice
the dark shadow
that is hovering
and slowly making
its way to your very
core.

^ Again, I really love how questions can send those vibes of being petrified.. I can now walk in your shoes. really love the tension you're trying to build.. with such a style.

Does the hair
stick up at the
back of your neck

^ I like this... those are goosebumps! I'm really sucked into this, from head to toe.

Can you feel
the goose bumps
invade your body

^ honestly.. I think those three lines do not say anything new.. so I suggest you remove them and just paste the: "as though it was
a cold winters day." ...after... "with fear"

You begin
to doubt
your own sanity
and plead that
what is happening,
is not real.

^ This is my second best stanza! I love the intermixing of the questions method.. and beginning to speak to us!

But deep down
you know that
it is.

^ Those words sum up the title: The Haunting..

Liz, you really nailed this write. Kudos to you..

Liz,

Another great piece by you. I think this piece is really chilling and puts the reader on edge. The atmosphere in the poem is really creepy and it has all the tension on a horror movie.

5/5