Outstanding! I really enjoyed reading this poem. I really felt for you in this piece and my heart goes out to you if this poem is based on a true story.
"They ignored me
hoping it would
My favorite part
7 years ago
by Ms Happiness
I officially announce, that I hate sad poems, because they make me cry. But I love them cause they're true feeling, poured in a poem making it so special.
Bad memories can be so harsh on us, specially those that happened when we ate kids, cause they'll always have an effect on us, even id we forgot them.
Wish you the best<3
An amazing poem, written by an amazing person:)
I came across this yesterday, and I still don't know what or how to comment..
This just captures sadness and beauty perfectly. It is personal, not all of us go through what you do and not everyone would understand, but still, this is a relatable piece.
'Even my heart is swaying against my forbidden memories and I feel trapped within the walls of my own mind, where I can never be set free.'
^'Swaying' connotes a gentle movement, something so involuntary. And when I come across that word, I imagine something gently moved/blown by a gentle breeze. But the way you penned that here was quite different and unique. It's as though it's fast-paced instead of 'gentle'.
'You see there's this image.'
^With just five words, you managed to leave me breathless. It's like a warning, or a start of a story that gives suspense.
'This disturbing picture which has taken grasp of my life and released venom deep within my blooded veins, and it's where
^Heart-breaking :( One of the most depressing stanzas I've read in a while, but still, it is beautiful. Hm, should 'blooded' be 'bloodied'?
'I was six.'
^Again, a little sentence. Yet heart-breaking and filled with emotion.
'They ignored me hoping it would disappear, which it did.
Maybe this time
I want to forget
^The ending's certainly sad, yet there was a hint of hope within the last sentence.
Overall, I love this piece for its powerful emotional impact though it was/is sad. The simple word choice complimented the sad tone. Great job. Keep writing :)
Also, I want to nominate this. But it's only Tuesday and I used two of my votes already! Awesome poems this week. If no one nominates this by Friday, I will :)