"It is the body melting in the Milky Way,
crying over the spilt milk of yesterdays,
it is the body licking the stains on the floor
as our loving weak lips dream of the past
and ask for more."

----"wow" this stanza, is stellar.
it is not the heart but the body.

Some of these poets die to expresses something, yours comes easily, naturally, beautifully!!

Awesome sweetness! :) This poem is deeper than deep Karla I fell in love with each line.

It is not the heart that bends,
bows and touches the nebulae
and almost half of this galaxy
with a delicate gesture.
^^^

So soft spoken it grabs your attention with this first stanza, but eases you into the second...

It is not the heart that measures
the absolute, the unexpected dimension
of death when pleasure still kills amorously.

^^^ such powerful lines, chock full of wisdom and truth. Each word is carefully chosen, each equally strong. By this time I am sucked completely in!

It is the body melting in the Milky Way,
crying over the spilt milk of yesterdays,
it is the body licking the stains on the floor
as our loving weak lips dream of the past
and ask for more.

^^^but these lines...OMG! The reader can visualize this whole stanza easily with your graphic details and awesome imagery. I love the way you incorperate the Milky way into your poem- the spilt milk of yesterday(effin love this) and the body licking stains on the floor.

Bravo Karla and good luck in the contest!!!

Consuming fire of want and desire in this poem. EXALT! tc

A nice poem Karla.
You've used some great words here in a way that's breathtaking! Wow!!! Enjoyed this.

A truly beautiful poem. 5/5

mandy :)

This poem made me go out of this world! I loved the images you've used here and the tone of the words. Captivated me!

Awesome write

x

Woo hoo!!!

Congrats on your win hun!

x

Exquiste Karla, Exquisite, Congrats.

I think you are worth more than one liners.. you're worth detailed critique, but, whatever...

just know that I am always your NUMBER ONE FAN.

And I have this CRAVING for Karla's pieces.....

<3 :)

Peace!

It is not the heart that bends,
bows and touches the nebulae
and almost half of this galaxy
with a delicate gesture.

^An opening stanza that is something so
different as it incorporates the planets to the
writer's feelings..nicely written!

It is not the heart that measures
the absolute, the unexpected dimension
of death when pleasure still kills amorously.

^Reading this made me smile. It has a touch
of subtle passion and words says more then
action here...nice imagery!

It is the body melting in the Milky Way,
crying over the spilt milk of yesterdays,
it is the body licking the stains on the floor
as our loving weak lips dream of the past
and ask for more.

^Now this is a wonderful passionate ending with a satisfaction! Well penned and congrats on the win :D

Very Smooooooth! Very lovely words that weave such intricate images.

I like how you have incorporated the stars and other heavenly bodies into your write. It takes the reader out into space and I felt like I was slowly drifting freely whist reading your write.

But with the last stanza, it does somehow bring you back to earth and I like what you have done.

Lovely write.

I needed this write on Monday. I needed to see it on the front page. I wanted actually to comment once I read it but I have been struggling with analyzing it perfectly. And I guess that is because it really could be interpreted in many different ways. I hope I'm not wrong.

This write doesn't only show your wisdom as in every other write from you. No, it also gives you that desire of thinking in various manners. It gives you that feeling of being a one of a kind woman, a one of a kind human-being.

I love how you incorporated parts of the space into your piece, it felt undescribibly original and creative. The way you played on words such as 'the Milky Way' and 'milk' made this poem unique and a pleasure to read.

I don't know if you will find it weird but this write of you reminds me of another older write (also written by you) it was in your older account. I learnt it by heart and couldn't get enough of it. I'm still not over it. I could remind you:

'Let us follow the muses
while the hours abuse desire,
and this kiss searches for you.'

I cannot believe your ability to connect the body with the soul, the psyche and the heart with what's concrete and material. You are a goddess, a brilliant poetess in my opinion, Karla.

Awesome, thought-provoking write!

Much has already been said. But I will tell you myself that this really is an enjoyable read. You never cease to amaze me with your writes, and this is a fully-deserved win. Congrats!

I've read this gem numerous times Karla, but haven't known what to say in a comment. First congratulations though! An awesome, well-deserved win :)

When I first read this, I could automatically tell by the title that this poem would draw me in and probably touch me with meaning, and it did. I thought of love in these verses, something so delicate, something interlocked with the soul and the body as you express.

I love everything about this poem, how you seem to still regard the heart to such a high degree, but still say that it isn't the heart that makes such a passionate move, it is the body. Really creative and deep, good job Karla, please keep writing!!!

MaryAnne

You got that; penned so well <3