Turn The Key (Triple Tetractys)

by Meme   Jun 14, 2012


Keys
despite
being just
perfect will lose
the struggle to unlock imperfect doors.
But even if keys fail to turn, and doors
still hide questions
unanswered,
we can
try.
There
may be
a window
on the other
side, or perhaps that perfect secret door.

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© Copyright 2012 by: gIrL
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Tetractys, a poetic form invented by Ray Stebbing, consists of at least 5 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 10
syllables (total of 20). Tetractys can be written with more than one verse, but must follow suit with an inverted syllable count. Tetractys can also bereversed and written 10, 4, 3, 2, 1.

Double Tetractys: 1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1

Triple Tetractys: 1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1, 1, 2, 3, 4, 10

and so on ...

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  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    Great effort, until you attempt to write one, you do not fully appreciate how difficult these can be, because you have to make every word count as they are limited.
    You have managed this very well.
    After reading this I think I will have another crack at them.

    regards

    Darren

  • 11 years ago

    by Lioness

    Awesome job with this form hun. You are doing so well with them, I love reading them!

    Awesome write, I love poems that turn out to be a pic of some kind. I will try to do that myself though I am sure I won't be as good lol

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by Boy

    I love challenging writing.. and your poems makes me inspire to write more and more.. keep it up..

  • 11 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Cool! Your form looks like a UFO.

    Excellent buildup using appropriate pauses at the ends of lines. Separate "maybe" into two words: "may be." It becomes proper syntax & does not lose the format.

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      I was going for a key shape, but I got a UFO instead? Lol

      Ok, will separate it right now :)

  • 11 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow, Meme I'm in awe! I really enjoyed reading this poem! First, this structure looks really difficult! So hats off for you for writing this poem with such lovely meaning! I love you structured this poem, it looks like a key! Did you do that on purpose? I love it!!!

    I love this poem... I'm still "wowing" in my head!!

    =D

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      Hahaha, thanks hon. And yes, I decided to write it as triple tetractys so its shape resembles that of a key :)

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