Cliche Poetry

I remember dying
for minutes when
we first met,
your perfect odor
held my breath.

Perfct..dnt knw abt others bt i lvd dis poem

I am really sorry if I am invading space here but kind of wrote something as an extension of this one . . . got inspired after reading this :D

"I love you like you're
the last drug for my addiction,
as if each dream hides
in your eyes,
like the magic lives
on those lips,
it's all within you
that my liberation lies."

This is one amazing poem . . . please please please add more to this one . . . complete it . . . pour more of yourself into it :-)
BTW this is the first entry in my favorites list :-)

Pink, cliche and cheesy. My kinda poem.

Hun!

I love that you are writing something with a positive, happy and love tone!

The first two lines made me think though, the last hope for hunger.

I keep thinking that may have something to do with your past relationships and how you feel they may have failed you. Maybe you think this is your last hope in being able to feel love (which I don't believe because you woman, are lovable)

The second stanza was gorgeous. I love how you have described that you died for a few minutes when meeting this person. It made me think of how when in movies you see the person walk in and everything becomes slow motion, everything freezes and slows down, you're focusing on this one person. Like love at first sight.

A BEAUTIFUL POEM HUN

LOVED IT

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