Cheron the souless sailor with a boat and no oar
Ushers lost souls across Acheron to limbo's door
To only find yourself upon a very deep valley
Where pain and sorrow is its graving finale
Blessed with no moment to sigh but torment
Where souls have lost the tune to fashion and fine garment
An abymal of seven castle walls
Where pagans,unbaptized children,authors and philosophers brawl
A chamber shared by Socrates,Homer,Virgil and Caesar
With men as great as these,life is nothing but a teaser
Curse be the lord as each said foolishly
Lack to say this,and woe is thee
Food is scarce and worms are cheap
A place ur eyes would tear,voice mute and your heart leap
I thought I left my comment on this poem before but it seems that I didn't...
Okay, I like the story and how you painted it to us readers. I did have to read it a couple of times but thats because of the vocables that were used in this piece. Which is good, I like them. I also like the rhymes, I find doing rhymes to be tough but you did good with them, specially since you are rhyming in longer lines, pretty cool.
Amazing piece, right up my alley
Very descriptive and the ryhme scheme was good. the imagry was very good but i had to read it a couple of times. (mainly because of the big words lol)
As soon as i got it i loved it
keep writing like this sir!
"To only find yourself upon a very deep valley
Where pain and sorrow is its graving finale"
was my fav part. Du to personal preference
5/5 from me