Comments : Desperate (Haiku)

  • 13 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    Brilliant thoughts lol! Few words can give books of meanings.

  • 13 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    Haha....lol...nice one..liked how you tell of ur love for nature especialy with the relaxing sound of the waterfall.i must say,i never expected that ending,the humour realy was good and gave the piece more life.

  • 13 years ago

    by Chelsey

    LMAO Liz, you funny little wit omgosh....isnt that funny though. The sound of water falling is sooo soothing unless we have to pee, then our pee intensifies lol

    Loved this. Interesting topic

  • 13 years ago

    by Wild flower

    OiMG hahahahaha thats so funny, you're really brilliant.

  • 13 years ago

    by Decayed

    LMAO, Lizz

    THIS IS A BOMB!!!!!!!!!

    hahhahaha, EPIC EPIC EPIC

  • 13 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Lol... now I don't know anyone who would not laugh at that! It is so funny, that has to be shared with a wider audience lol!

    <3 xx

  • 13 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I LOVE THIS!

    Isnt it the truth ??

    Waterfalls are beautiful, calming and peaceful... but if you have to pee... forget it... they are horrible!! giggles!!

  • 13 years ago

    by nouriguess

    HAHAHAHA.

  • 13 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    :)

  • 13 years ago

    by L

    Haha, I was not expecting that end, brilliant.

  • 13 years ago

    by Darren

    Great little poem, starts so serene then reigns us back to normality with the ending.
    I would probably add a ';' to the end of when and a ! after pee.
    (only my opinion)
    made me laugh
    regards
    Darren

  • 13 years ago

    by Meme

    Hahaha .. You hold such power in only few words Liz.

    Amazing!!!

  • 13 years ago

    by Unknown

    HAHAHAHAHA.

    That is nothing but the truth!

    Fantastic, hilarious haiku, Liz!!! :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Karla

    He heheLoveddddd it!

  • 13 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Lol Liz. You're awesome :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    Lol hehe this made me smile. I think you have a great sense of humor and the fact you can write something amusing is a talent because most poets fail to be funny but you succeed.

    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Hi there my fellow Aussie!

    I read your poetry often but I've been a bit slack in the commenting department. At the moment I have a massive fascination with short poetry so when I saw you had a haiku posted I couldn't resist dropping by to your page.

    I must say, I totally didn't expect the last line but it made me smile due to the rawness you presented lol. By raw I mean it was honest and straight to the point. I guess I should learn to expect the unexpected from you huh.

    Nice little read for a laugh!
    Mel

  • 13 years ago

    by Formidable Muse

    Haha, this is fantastic (: