Shattered (senryu)

I love the concept here, as well as the emotions.

I think you could change 'where' to: when, since a 'day' is a time, not a place.

Actually, 'it' is correct. Stress, as a noun may be plural, but I assume it is singular here so the use of 'it' is correct. 'Bottled forms' is simply the object of the preposition - 'it' pertains to the subject (stress), not the object. Hope that made sense, lol.

Great piece, Chelsey.

This poem speaks volumes in just those three lines. As I'm pretty sure everyone has come to the point of being stressed out so much, we wish we could stranger the word "stress" all the way to it's grave. Great job., I think the poem is fine how it is with bottled forms, as not every bottle takes the same shape, so forms would be the appropriate wording.

I think it is ok with bottled forms although I am not sure if it should be this or not but the way I read it makes sense? So if this was mine, I would have used bottled forms.

I can guess what made you wrote this and I am glad you vented it out. If nothing else it created one more talented poem to add to your strong collection.

Hugs xx

This is awesome, I know exactly how you feel. I dont know whether I would smash them or take them on a boat and chuck them out to sea.

A lot of people will relate to this and it shows that a tiny poem can be really powerful if written well.

My only nit is 'forms' is plural, and 'it' is singular, maybe you could change 'it' for 'them',

If it wasn't a senryu you could change 'it' to 'the hell out of them!!!'

(only joking)

great read

Yes yes yes!! Break free from that stress :)
Loved the feeling put into this, good senryu, the image sticks with you.