Life through my eyes

Powerful, stirring write, Tony. Five from me.

Wow... this is such a beautiful and inspiring poem... You are absolutely right, we do take our eyes for granted... but generally some of us take seeing, hearing, feeling etc for granted. And I love these kinds of poems that remind us that there is much more to be grateful for.

I love how you wrote this poem from the perspective of someone who's blind. I think that is very clever and hard to do. It was a really lovely written poem. I enjoyed it!

Great job :)

Fate put his mighty hand across my tiny exsistence.

Wow! What an opening stanza, and so heart wrenching, I just felt like life was sucked away from you with that description. Seriously, when you think 2 yrs old you think "perfect, innocent" and to have something drastic happen to that amazing little person is just not right..

I loved this piece so much, I find so much sadness and confusion in your words..

Sometimes people think not being able to see means I can't find the imperfections in my life but when times seem dark I believe we can see things ,a lot clearer

^ this was beautiful...succchh a powerful statement and it makes me agree with you. Love it!!

I always love reading your work, always so creative, like no other. My jaw always drops because it's never what I expect. You should be proud of that, uniqueness is hard to come by since everything is usually always been written about once before... this, I haven't read anything like it.

The persona is blind, they see life differently... through the other senses. I've always heard that is true... that the blind has heightened senses like smell and touch. However, they can still 'see' life the same as anyone who can truly see... they see darkness, love, heartache... etc... just because they can't actually see it doesn't mean they don't feel it.

I was two years old, when fate
put its mighty hand across my tiny
existence and took away something
so precious the whole world takes for granted.

- excellent opening, such a strong impact and the use of the word tiny really emphasises how young you were and innocent to the sadness in the world.

I read with my perfectly still fingers
as I emphasize my brain
with knowledge that each word shares,
but will never see the beauty
of that written word.

- this is interesting, it is a bit of a mystery reading this verse alone and makes you read on to find out what you are meaning, It is very nicely written.

Before rain fall, I smell its natural fragrance
but will never see it caress the earth, I hear
her voice as it surrounds me but will never
see her smile,as I tell her how much,
I love her.

- it becomes more clear in this verse that perhaps you have lost your sight, and this is why you cannot see things, it is a very unique idea to write about and you add in emotion which makes each verse give an impact of power.

Sometimes people think not being able to see
means I can't find the imperfections in
my life but when times seem dark
I believe we can see things ,a lot clearer

- this is very powerful indeed, it holds a clear message and you are so true that we take so much for granteed.

for like the wind, I can't see life but
I feel, breathe and live with it.

- loved this ending and the whole poem, very unique and thought provoking into what my life would be like without my sight and how much I would miss.

Great work, keep it up.