Hold On To Him (chained Tanka's)

This piece spoke my mind .. I so relate to it... Sometimes some events, some people become so integral in our lives that we capture them, their expressions, their part of life spent with us in a diary of trust. I just loved every bit of this and the style acquired didn't affected the meaning, sense and feel of this write.. An emotionally captivating write...

Dear diary, please
make sure he comes to visit
your versos when I'm
gone. But for now let me just
annotate the pages out.

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The opening is fantastic to make the reader cling to the poem... atleast to me... It shows how you have to fill in your book of life just to make it give a glimpse of you to your love and how you don't want to lose any detail for him...

Show him the traces
of tears I shed upon your
pages when I first
came to realize he was
in fact the first man I loved.

^^

So emotional... Brings afore a vivid picture of your first days of love which are so exciting and also how many tears you have shed for him...

Tell him about the
girl; whom with only his name,
wrote ballads that filled
her library of thoughts. Where
he possessed every corner.

^^
Oh so emotional.... Your one-sided love has made you go crazy for him and this verse portrays it well... It shows how passionate you are for him... beautiful:)

Ask him to read out
loud all the unsung verses
she planned to whisper
into his ears; the sounds that
lulled her, the ones from his heart.

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It shows how you pen lyrics for him which you always wanted to sing for him and whisper in your moments of love and those hums which just was left unsaid and it filled melody in your life too:)

And let him keep you,
dear diary, let him hold
on to every word.
And together with you, let
him figure out who I was.

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Yes how your diary can screen you, your heart to him, your love for him which he was unable to see all these days...

I am in love with this piece... Great one:)

Dear Diary.... Let him figure out who I was..... Great work yet again....:) Now I can say u r d most matured poet I know on pnq, keep it up,

nyc to read one n dat too so wonderful after a long time...:)

This is sad...

I pictured you writing this in your diary and communicating to your diary still about this man.

Wanting the man to really see your feelings, because it seems that he hasn't done so. :(

but you really want him to know how you felt about him and how important he was for you.

You really want him to realize who you were when you were in love with him.

and pretty much this diary is the last means for you to still live in him through your words and feelings.

May be if he reads the diary he could finally see what he didn't not but it will be too late.

This is really sad Meme.

5/5

Show him the traces
of tears I shed upon your
pages when I first
came to realize he was
in fact the first man I loved.

Tell him about the
girl; whom with only his name,
wrote ballads that filled
her library of thoughts. Where
he possessed every corner.

Ask him to read out
loud all the unsung verses
she planned to whisper
into his ears; the sounds that
lulled her, the ones from his heart.

Loved it..no words..

There is this ease I always get from your pieces. Your language is so easy and flows really good, though I mean that positively; you only depend on simplicity to deliver these strong emotions. Lovely!!!