Sincere humbles (Grook)

Grook...HAH what a funny word. But really, this was a very good piece, I enjoyed it!

I really don't know all the different styles of writing and don't care to know with that being said, I like this poem because it relates to the journey of life.

Really who don't want the big fish? Meaning who really don't want to have the best things that this life can offer.

Another thing I found interesting is the statement about forgiveness, when someone hurts or offends us it's in our hand to choose to forgive and forget

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This is great khalid

I love how you attempt many forms

works really well

Sorry for the double post

The form.
I really liked reading this form as it is completely new to me. As I haven't read any other poems of this form, I'd say this is a good attempt if not better. So kudos!

The rhyme/pace.
I think the pace was suitable for the content and the rhyme scheme was clever and not often used which I really enjoyed. I also think the simplicity and easy-reading of the rhymes helped emphasise the content and title of the poem.

The message.
I think, because of the irony that was necessary for the form, the message was sometimes unclear. With a different form I think it would have made more impact.

The title.
Personally, I like the title but its use of it within the second line of the poem kind of ruins its emphasis a little. Perhaps leaving it until later in the poem would have benefitted but it's ok.

The flow.
The flow of the piece was flawless as all of your poems are. (:

Overall.
A really enjoyable piece that isn't straight to the point but isn't totally unclear. I particularly liked your rhyme pattern and the ending was absolutely brilliant.

Five/Five