The tears in her eyes... [ Chained Tanka ]

by Amreen   Dec 17, 2012


A piercing silence
tears the tranquil of life and
shatters mute souls,as
an innocent gets killed for
temporary amusement.

She lays lifeless down,
her blood flows incessantly.
She's mourning as tears
flow from her eyes; as if they
ask the reason for her fault.

Her kids rub their nose
agaisnt her; surrounding her,
whispering their cries.
Afraid and unaware of
the injustice that happened.

Her dead eyes depict-
her happy family ruined,
her kids turned orphan.
Can we ever empathize
for the sad tears in her eyes?

* This poem speaks about Hunting of animals. How innocent animals get killed for fruitless hobby, silently breaking and taking away lives.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    I can see you really so passionate about conveying the pains of animals in their habitats. Its rather unfortunate people derive passion in hunting for pure thrilling fun and having to express it outrightly, makes one cringe.
    Below is my comprehension of the poem.

    1st Stanza:
    One can see the overwhelming pain evident here, how the sight of cutting short a clans life is felt by these animals in their kingdom. The peace clouding their lives is now thwarted, causing pangs of fear and pain. And adding more pain to the injury is knowing the purpose was that of pleasure.

    2nd Stanza:
    The animal killed lies motionless in her own pool of blood. Others mourning her sudden departure as tears trickle down their face, asking why they're subjected to such ills; what's the fault of this animal.
    I can picture the scenario here, so vivid and gets one all emotional. Feels like watching their adventures and travails on animal planet.

    3rd Stanza:
    This is the most touching stanza to me, the kids clamoring round the lifeless body of their mum, letting out muffled cries, unaware of the reality flung at them. So innocent and vulnerable are they now to survive in this wilderness.

    4th Stanza:
    Her eyes project the uncertainty thrown at her kids, now orphans. Whether answers can ever satisfy muddled questions nor the compassion slitting through her. And ending on a final note whether we can ever feel nor comprehend the sadness in her.

    Hopefully people will come to realise the pain, fear and uncertainty these animals are subjected to by fulfilling personal frivolities. Let's pray situations will change and there's also a need to sensitize people of the dangers involved in such acts. As such hunting can be reduced.

    Amreen I always commend your poems because of how profound and insightful they're. They're informative and inspiring and I can't find better words to show how glad I am to feast and learn from your poetic well.
    Stay blessed my sister, much love.
    Ciao!

  • 9 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    I love this . it's so sad . actually made me cry because i could totally picture it. it sucks when a tragedy happens like that. hope this isnt personal experience.

  • 9 years ago

    by Marcy Lewis

    This is so terribly sad. I never really approved of hunting, but I never really gave much thought as to protesting it, and this makes me want to.

    Her dead eyes depict-
    her happy family ruined,
    her kids turned orphan.

    ^The babies already had lost a father, it sounds, since they are orphaned. Too often this is truth, and the little ones die off trying to fend for themselves.

    Great write. I never expected this, reading the title.

  • 9 years ago

    by Autumn Leaves

    This is great poem sweetie, many poems are written every week just for this site yet they lack meaning and depth. I appreciate your theme here about the blood of innocent animals being shed. I like that you're given these helpless animals a voice no living thing should be kill to feed any one stupid ego or for fun.

    The words you used here are powerful they touched my heart and made me feel empathy for these helpless wonderful creatures.

    Amreen this a wonderful poem...keep writing.

  • 9 years ago

    by Adelle

    The emotion in this piece is intense, it haunts the reader after the poem is finished. A very vivid piece, the structure of the poem is such that the flow is perfect.