Riding the Train

by Maple Tree   Feb 2, 2013


Steam loaded,
taking a ride,
far and wide, leaving
hand prints at the base
of arrival, screaming engine
burns.

What a rush, salty skies
whisper explosive tension
in the air of heightened
excitement, faster-
faster- twisting, turning
welcoming the tunnel-

Eight inches to go, railway
and my way... This ride
is a thunderous explosive,

locomotive-

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  • 12 years ago

    by Darren

    As I am an entirely innocent person, I only read this as a train spotter would and I am left wondering

    'did you take the number of this steam locomotive?'

  • 12 years ago

    by Wild flower

    This is amazing, I love the use of the train
    Great poem:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    You are so freaking hilarious! I totally got the sensual feeling here as well..

    AMAZIZNG metaphor for it...honestly, you are the Queen of metaphors, but this one actually blew me away..its hard to cover up a personal, naughty poem *cough cough*....but you did that entirely to well here, making two stories seem beautiful...one about a REAL journey on a train ride..another on a ...well you know. LOL

    I freaking love this and I know you knew I would! :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I love the changing pace to this.piece, makes it feel as if as a reader you're actually on the train, gathering speed.
    Really clever wording too. Awesome write here.

    Hmmm, I re-read after seeing Angies comment and I dunno now Lol
    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Angie

    Well, I don't know what anyone else is gonna say or feel about this one... but to me, its very sensual... hhhhmmmmm

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