Mine Beloved

Wow.. I love this poem.

I love the repetition of the 2nd line as a refrain in each stanza.

The poem goes smooth for lines 1, 2 and 4 in the three stanza. However, I prefer you fix the 3rd line in these stanza to read a constant number of syllables, for example 6 as in the 1st stanza "will pass in a moment".

Ending the poem with:

"Beloved cast off mine
as if it never were."

after the repetition of 3 similar stanza made the poem have a unique style, loveable to the readers. I personally loved it.
Thank you for sharing this with us.

I like what you did with the poem, you used some refrains and just changed the last two syllables on the first line of each stanza. For instance, you used the refrain "as what" then you repeated the other refrain "all that is mine in the whole poem" except the last stanza.

Ask what to give.
All that is mine
I will give
with all my heart.

But you also used repetition. Whatever you added at the end of the first sentence of each stanza, you incorporated in the third line of that stanza. For instance in the third stanza "ask what to give" "GIVE" was used in the third line of that same Stanza. And the same procedure was implement for the three stanza. However, the first and second stanza to me sounds smooth, the third one sounds a bit strange, at least to me and the line "beloved cast off mine" sounds strange too. At least to me.

Other than that I enjoy this read.

"We all live to live"
More giving than taking you seem to say, must admit its atough poem to crack. Has contradictions within it yet rightfully penned.

Awww....this is so pretty! Great write!:) 5/5