Lovers

by Jenni Marie   Apr 4, 2013


These lovers constantly at war
in love; alas it can not be
until death do us part they swore
these lovers constantly at war
love can no longer be restored
it's time to set each other free
these lovers constantly at war
in love; alas it can not be

*Triolet

*For an M&M Challenge

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  • 11 years ago

    by Piogga

    Ahh this is such a lovely poem, Jenni. I could read it again and again. It seems simple and easy to write while reading but I agree: it's hard to think of something that won't be cliche, at the same it has to rhyme. and the thing about repetition with these kinds of forms is that the line you choose shouldn't bore/annoy the reader. The simplicity of the title works so well too. Great job!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Britt

    Triolet is a really hard form, because you have to be able to get lines that mesh well together without being cliche, or without being irritating with their repetition... and THEN worry about rhyme! lol You picked the perfect words here.. my favorite line is the 'in love; alas it can not be'. I really adore the use of "alas".. it was creative to see. The poem itself is really quite sad and I know so many people/relationships/marriage like this. It's just not supposed to be that hard!.. but at the same time good things are worth fighting for. Awesome triolet! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Amazing form, such a simple inspiration yet perfect. You picked the perfect words in which when repeated they flowed very well. Also a rhyming form which makes it harder, for me at least. :P Sad but really lovely form, you did excellent! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    This was superium, wonderful job with this poem!! 100/100

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