Black Wings: Icarus

by Jack Nightengale   Apr 27, 2013


Wings now blackened spread within the light,
Strong flaps allowing me to take flight.
Towards the clouds in which I want to sore above,
All hope vanished in abandoned love.

Rising higher reaching for the giant ball of fire,
My wings grow heavy and my body starts to tire.
My wings begin to burn and fry,
As the chains stretch from the ground and snatch me from the sky.

Being drawn from this light,
Struggling with these chains with all my might.
More and more the chains pull me back,
And I sink further into this abyss pitch black.

Suddenly I stop fighting and stop trying to escape,
The darkness molds and approaches in my shape.
Flightless monster chained with no hope and nothing to discuss,
I've given up, I'm done, my name is Icarus.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I really liked your use of language, and your rhymes were strong. ONe thing I will say, though, is that I think the third line in the second stanza is a little too short. I understand that because of the next line is slightly longer, making the line before shorter should balance it out, but I think it's a little too short.

    I also particularly liked the last line. It was strong.

    Brad

    P.S. Please vote and/or comment HONESTLY on every poem you read.

  • 11 years ago

    by Biancas Veil

    I like the way you have adapted this this story to your writing style great work
    I love stories from Greek mythology.

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