If you could ask a tree a question, what might it be?
O the great stories it might tell.
Amongst its branches, many creatures dwell.
When I approach it, all of the little creatures flee.
O the great things I may learn from a simple tree.
If only it could come alive, and out of its shell.
So that to me its stories it may tell.
O the great things I may hear from a tree
O the wise words that could be told by the brush
O the things that this tree might say
If only it could talk, and spring to life
The things it could tell of the wind that tends to rush
The things and thoughts all held at bay.
The stories it could tell of its times of strife
This Sonnet has been penned beautifully and it flows without any interruptions whatsoever. It makes me think too, what these old trees can teach us humans..loved the read :)
5 years ago
by mazzy star
I loved the idea of talking with the trees.
I mean some of the trees near my house are very old. I guess, more than 150 years old. I am sure if they could talk they have a lot more to tell than our grandparents.
I am a fan of a well written sonnet and the question you ask at the beginning is great :). I think it really shows how in touch with nature this person is. The thought of asking a tree a question is very curious. And you make the reader think of something (at least for me). You would never think a tree as being wise or "old" but it kinda is true. As a former tree hugger I loved this.
Here I liked how you didn't pause too much. The flow of the poem was very lovely and it captures the readers attention. And as the other commenter stated I don't think you need to change anything here. Well done !