Forbidden Freedom

by cassie hughes   Oct 1, 2014

Sinking in this self made mire
of vaporous dreams,
a hiding place I once thought
left behind.
I ponder on the devils promise
once so blithely given.
And miss the naive child
within my mind.
The way things were,
temptation knocked and always
I would answer
with a smile.
Forbidden freedom
found within the needle, lifted
grey of humdrum world
for just a while.
I know I need to leave,
to let the cool of winters
night remove the heat
of devils curse.
Yet soaring up above
this dreamland,
angels tears would
only make it worse.
Sinking in this self made mire
of vaporous dreams
I spread my wings
and fly.
Tomorrow I may rise
without a trace
then wish you and the world

Written for Saffies prompt challenge after being given the following prompts-

The devils promise
A hiding place
the way things were
forbidden freedom


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  • 5 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Agree with maddy - I love the style of this and the layout; it really works here. "I ponder on the devils promise once so blindly given" - I love that line. Excellent as always, Cassie.

  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I agree with Alex about this reminding me of the story about Pandora's box. But also the way you included all the topics was flawless and so seamless that it was beyond beautiful. The style you chose for this piece was great because it really created a smooth flow like silk without distracting the reader in other ways. It is well penned and beautiful. I love the way you took common things and gave them either personal details or a very unique spin on perspective. Thank you for writing this.

  • 6 years ago

    by CuteThingsGoneWrong

    This poem to me, represents kind of like pandoras box or the fruit of eden. You want the forbidden fruit so you take a bite and realize it wasnt what you wanted... They say that hope was the worst thing to come out of pandoras box you know, all these bad things and hope gave us the power to live through it all, all the pain and torture, A little off topic sorry.
    I love a lot of the descriptions, i've read some of your works and a lot of them seem to be great for imagery and discriptions. You can paint a good picture and make the reader really feel what your feeling :3 I love it.

    I also love some of the repitition. ALl in all this was a good for the promt you were given and i enjoy it so.