I have to say I too think the brevity works well, it wasn't something I was expecting but the abrupt end does prompt that emotion. "powder blues" is such a soft image, reminds me of baby blues and youth/ innocence. I'm not sure if "Irrevocable becomes this moment" works or not. To me, it sounds a bit forced but I know the word placement is different. Also, maybe since this moment is implied, you could add another specific or visual, like "Irrevocable- ....." Just an idea though.
I love the shortness of this poem. Sometimes all it takes is a couple lines to truly hit an emotion. In that moment, with that person (whoever it may be), you feel at peace, like you have been waiting to feel "at home" for so long. Home is when you are with them. Great job, girlie. :)
5 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
For people, we want to know that we feel safe and sound. This brings off being just that. I can definitely see this being two ways though. A child. Which would make sense, because of the poem as a whole. You see the reflection of the child and see so much of them within you. The powder blue, is in the clothes that they wear or the sky and how they brighten up your life, or they are the sun in your blue sky. You could never take this moment from your life, because it's home and that is the one place that you feel safe. Or you could be talking about your partner and how you see themselves in you as well. The title is wonderful as well because you adore the people in your life and you do feel safe. Well done, nominated. 5/5