Strong Women Never Bleed

Told you i'd be back on this one.......Nominated :P

"Strangled, choking on your scent;
I am helpless in your arms. Feeble;
wholly helpless in your love."

this poem could make a dead mistress' heart skip a beat o_o you wrote it so well I really felt the lines I quoted.. there really is a person out there that u just can't resist no matter what damage it will bring..... when a mistress is involved everyone will lose, poem was definitely captivating in a dark way love et!!

kyra

I so love this poem will try to explain why....what you did with your prompt was awesome soooo dark and all shadowy :))

"I have told you that you are my sun;
never have I thought I'd be doomed
to live in your shadow.""

^^^^ EPIC opening stanza right here, the conflict speaks volumes and draws the reader in and BAM! we're hooked.

"Absorbed by dark, wandering
like a black unending night;
in no way reaching your sunbeams."

^^^^ UGH...the feeling of losing ones self, hopelessness is something that everyone experiences in life, but I really love how you use this within the context of this piece and your word choice is perfect!!!

I was going to break down the whole piece but I don't think I need to... but I will summise it........how the mistress is a slave to her own emotions, knowlingly and freely enduring all is something that I find really emotional and is something that you painted so vividly with your words. Nana, you know I am a fan, but genuinly I thought that this piece flowed amazingly, your word choice was fantastic and I just love this write.

And as for your closing...

"Mistresses die on the inside,
altering to mummies; inanimate.
Mistresses simply fade into void,
and void has but void, to bleed."

AlL kInDs Of SeRiOuSlY cRaZy GoOd LiNeS!!!!!!!!!