by earlgreytea Apr 29, 2015
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
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I once found a heart in marzipan, |
by Em
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Fantastically written and wonderful imagery |
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Well written, miss. :) |
by earlgreytea
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Thank you! ^-^ |
by earlgreytea
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Thank you. :)) |
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Wow, this is such a great piece. Full of emotion, the wording is just perfect and I love the line "Like teardrop needles in my spine." You have obviously had a chance to play with this since Saffie commented because I found it flowed beautifully. |
by earlgreytea
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Yes I did. XD Thank you. :) |
by Baby Rainbow
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This poem has such good potential, the meaning and wording is great, but I would advise changing the layout, and fixing the punctuation errors for your readers to make sense of the poem better. |
by earlgreytea
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I was typing it on an insanely old phone, I could not see the painful structure until now. |