These My Wings

What a perfectly written poem. I love the way it's set out, too - it works really well. Some lovely lines in this. Well done.

I loved the wording in this piece, the flow is a big positive in the poem itself and it works well because the lines of the poem are so short, a lot of people would be turned off by this but not me, it works well.

But the message of the poem seems to be saying goodbye to one person that we loved. BUT here it is not a typical poem, it seems here that instead of going through your eyes, you wrote the poem through the eyes of the person you are saying goodbye to. I thought that was a unique style and one I have not seen a lot in poetry.

anyways. It seems here you want them to move on from you and that it hurts to say goodbye to someone who was part of our lives. But they seem to be taking it hard then you are, you don't want them to cry or make a scene. I loved the ending the most here and that is what I nominated it for, the imagery though it might be fiction, the reality is, after we lose someone we don't want them to see our dark side and that is why you want them to say goobye, all in all this was an excellent write. 5/5

Lovely piece, nominated!