The Hummock Key (Triolet)

by Maple Tree   Oct 23, 2016


Upon that hillside, far away
holds a secret covered with moss
gravestones glisten an eerie gray
upon that hillside, far away
whispers shadow in light of day
tales untold of a tainted loss
upon that hillside, far away
holds a secret covered with moss

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Triolet

A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines.

This poem is 8 syllables in length.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Beautifully executed with lovely nature rich descriptions. Loved it. Milly x

  • 9 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello, Andrea

    These forms are so hard to pull off. Not only are there repeated end rhymes, but also repeaten whole lines. When written well, the outcome has a song like quality, with beat and lovely refrains.

    I have one suggestion I'd like to offer. To my ear, if you use the word, 'that' instead of 'a' in the first, fourth and seventh lines, it sounds more fitting.

    Either way, the poem is beautiful, a tuneful rhyme, full of melancholy, steeped in olde mystery.

    Well done,

    Michael x

    • 9 years ago

      by Maple Tree

      Love your suggestion Michael, thank you!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Em

    Beautiful written by such a telling tell.

    Hugs, Em

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