Very true Kasie. We all have flaws and make mistakes but those things make us who we are and not one of us is perfect.
5 years ago
Kasie, this is a really good sonnet and it seems you have mastered this form very well. Again, I hope I can do them as well as you, Ben and Michael with the help of the group workshops.
1/ Well, what can I say? This is a powerful opening with a very thought provoking message (I feel) and though diamonds are unbreakable and pleasant on the eyes doesn't mean they are nice on the inside if we could break them, eight? And to me the beauty is best on the inside not the out.
2/ This is a very inspiring part and I must say my favourite because we all need to be stronger than what we are but life is set in stone and I know it's cliched but everything happens for a reason and the things that are sent to test is are only sent if we are strong enough to withstand them or so I have been told anyway. Many of us can relate to this especially on this site.
3/ love this part as to me it's saying "I am different and if you don't love that then sod you."
Couplet/ Wisdom is most definitely better. Loved this.
Thank you, I chose the pearl, because a pearl is formed from a single grain of sand which over many years more sand is added and it forms a beautiful pearl. Each grain of sand symbolizes each flaw or problem we encounter that makes us who we are.
5 years ago
by Ben Pickard
This is excellent - truly. A really accomplished sonnet.