Slightly Broken (Italian sonnet/Acrostic)

by Kasie   Jan 30, 2017


Somewhere inside I've slightly broken down,
Like hanging branches from a dying tree.
Immoral blackened thoughts that flooded me,
Gave way the breaking dam that made me drown.
Half-hearted is the soul beneath this crown,
That tries to find its way, but cannot see.
Left lying in the darkness where I bleed,
You look at me, but do not see a frown.

Beneath these bloodshot eyes is hidden dirt,
Remembering the words that I was named.
Offensive is the poison I divert,
Knowingly bitten with sharp vicious fangs,
Escaping from the pain, so I avert;
Not letting venom rule my life again.

By: Kasie F

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  • 6 years ago

    by Abstract Poet

    Beautiful poem.

    • 6 years ago

      by Kasie

      Thank you

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Kasie, nice to see you back I thought the new site had put you off as I hadn't seen you around in some days then again, I know I was unable to fathom out how to get on then when I did it wouldn't let me. Anyway... Not only have you written a sonnet and I think a great one at that, you have written an acrostic too which I applaud you on because I know sonnets and acrostics aren't easy if done well, like here.

    1/ What an eye opening first part. I feel it gets straight into the nitty gritty that yes, you have broken down and though this may be true, It's truer still that you are positive and though broken and drowning in your own darkness you try to find your way again which will make you stronger each day, one step at a time. People around us may look straight through our fake smile and lying eyes but the people that truly care about and love us will know something isn't right.

    2/ Kasie, I love this because (and it's only my opinion) you are saying to hell with all these venomous words you have been told as they aren't true and though they beat you down the first time maybe years ago and no doubt often you will no longer let them rule your life and rightly so. Nobody should rule our life's apart from us.

    Great write,
    Em

    • 7 years ago

      by Kasie

      Thank you, your interpretation is on point. Also, this is the first time I have been able to get on the new site. I have been stuck on the old one for the past few days and haven't been able to post.

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    This is so good that I am lost for words!

    • 7 years ago

      by Kasie

      Thank you, I thought I would challenge myself to something a little different.

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