Little Ghost Girl

by deeplydesturbed   Aug 16, 2017


These last few weeks I’ve seen you there
Sometimes just a shadow; sometimes clear as day.
My mind constantly searching for answers
Should I be scared you decided to stay?
Please little ghost girl, if this is a game to you
I no longer wish to play…

I’ve been met with silence from you
every time I’ve tried to talk.
I do appologise each time you appear
As I do tend to stop and gawk.
How do you move, do you float around?
Or just like us do you walk?

Please little ghost girl
tell me what you need.
I’d like to see you pass on
I’d like to see you freed.
Freed from whatever ties you have here
please move on to your next life, I plead.

I hate feeling your presence
the presence of a sad lost soul.
Not just any sad lost soul
But that of a child’s ghoul.
A little girl none less
And it’s out of my control.

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  • 6 years ago

    by Mark

    Ah! Nams has taken on a harder rhyme structure. 2,4,6 rhyme in a six line (close to) stanza. abcbdb
    Four stanzas in total

    Little ghost girl is a really eye catching poem title. Can go in several directions. The first stanza it seems you actually see a ghost girl...however I wonder if you see a younger you. I'm not sure this poem answers that question...but poses the question subtly to the reader.... Sign of a great poem!

    You mention the last three weeks. As if an event occurred that caused you to see this ghost or image yourself. I wonder what caused this apparition. The line 'I no longer wish to play' does indicate this apparition is not desired. Almost feared.

    Second stanza reveals communication has been tried to this ghost. No answer. Wonder if this was a mirror what you were like when you were younger? Questioning the ghost does suggest an acceptance of its existence. Almost like your forced to face the lost little girl you once were. In many ways this is actually profound.

    Third stanza. Moves beyond acceptance to - how can I help this girl. Almost as though your wondering how can I free myself of this past when I was a lost little girl. Very moving.

    Last stanza consider 'none less' to 'nonetheless'. She is a burden upon you; this 'child's ghoul'. Powerful phrase. Last line 'and its out of my control' does suggest you belive you have no power over this...she is stuck with you.

    Very deep piece with consistent rhyming and great flow. I wonder (only to stop my curiosity) if you could indicate a little more if this girl is an image of a younger you. I'm anxious to know!!

    Great write Nams. Can't imagine why it didn't attract more comments..could it have been taken literary? Big hugs Nams :-)

    • 6 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Marky mark.. please not this has other parts to it. Possibly try the poem before and after :)
      U may find those answers

  • 6 years ago

    by Em

    Your rhyming seems to have gotten better in your absence

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