hurt (revised)

echoing distant sounds
if I screamed would she hear the uproar

ii.
only stretching to stars
when my scars need Neptune
because closer moons
might cause a rising tide

iii.
if breathing in water
is how she drowns
this makes me skeptical of oceans

I guess waters
are an easy way to test drama

iv.
she left me after drowning
I left a note on her desk

I loved your gasp

v.
if I held a coffee mug right now
the shaking would cause it to break

vi.
I'm a strong wind
I'm a strong wind
I'm a strong wind

repetition is a curse
that my love life seems to live

vii.
this is where the sun and moon part ways
but its obvious they still attract