Barely *Haiku*

by Nikkicola   Nov 1, 2018


Barely beating now
Lost in it's uncertainty
My heart is broken

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  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Nicely thought out, building the picture and then the final turn/twist at the end.
    My only critique would be to use a different title. Using a word from the main body of the poem is a shame when you have so few to play with. I often use it as a 4th line. Arrhythmia, perhaps?

    Anyway, good work.