New Dawn (Darcy’s Sonnet)

by Mr. Darcy   Jun 19, 2019


Why did the rain fall sting on all my days
and why did branded skin refuse to heal?
For years I’ve walked within this haunted maze
a curse contaminating what was real.
In mirrors of my mind I saw a light,
but, ev’ry turn I met a blinded man.
Until a voice inside became a fight,
how could I ever make a final stand?
It’s time to breathe an air that doesn’t choke.
It’s time to fight against the raging sea,
and as the shackles sink to murky moat,
I know I’ll kick to where I will be free.
Into the depths of hell, I cast your name,
a new identity, this day, I claim.

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- Mr. Darcy
© 2019

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  • 2 years ago

    by Abstract Poet

    Did you make this up I mean Darcy's Sonnet?
    I love this poem it was beautiful

    Congratulations on the win too!

    ~Abstract Poet~

  • 2 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    I'm a bit late to the party Mr D, but wow! Obviously I know perfectly well what this is about and I say go ahead, cast the name to hell and be reborn!
    I'm so glad this was a win for you xx
    =^.^=

  • 2 years ago

    by Mark

    Great win!

  • 2 years ago

    by Everlasting

    This sounded like a slap in the face.

    My reaction as I was reading was ,” dangggg...” (forgive my expression. I couldn’t help it).

    Just one question,
    What do you mean by Darcy’s sonnet?
    Are you creating your own rules? Other than that, I find this a great read. The ending was intense.

  • 2 years ago

    by Daniel

    There’s a real sense of biting purpose here. A lot of raw energy and towards the end, the poem shines, and I must say it’s an effective use of the sonnet form.

    I enjoyed the idea of fighting a raging sea, and the courage sewn into the words. Maybe it’s just me but:

    ‘It’s time to breathe an air that doesn’t choke.‘

    Unless ‘choke’ is used after ‘I’ or ‘you’, I always feel it needs an object? I would never say ‘this air is choking’, it’d be ‘this air is choking me’. Of course, poetic license but I found this line a little disquieting. The use of ‘an’ before air seemed a bit forced to meet the syllable count too.

    The last line too, already having ‘me’ as a subject of the sentence, would it not make more sense to say ‘a new identity for me is claimed’? Just a thought.

    The rest of the sonnet I enjoyed immensely. A great piece, Michael!

    • 2 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Daniel, thank you for this in depth comment. I like your suggestions too. I will chew over them and see how they taste.
      Praised.

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