New Dawn (Darcy’s Sonnet)

Did you make this up I mean Darcy's Sonnet?
I love this poem it was beautiful

Congratulations on the win too!

~Abstract Poet~

I'm a bit late to the party Mr D, but wow! Obviously I know perfectly well what this is about and I say go ahead, cast the name to hell and be reborn!
I'm so glad this was a win for you xx
=^.^=

Great win!

This sounded like a slap in the face.

My reaction as I was reading was ,” dangggg...” (forgive my expression. I couldn’t help it).

Just one question,
What do you mean by Darcy’s sonnet?
Are you creating your own rules? Other than that, I find this a great read. The ending was intense.

There’s a real sense of biting purpose here. A lot of raw energy and towards the end, the poem shines, and I must say it’s an effective use of the sonnet form.

I enjoyed the idea of fighting a raging sea, and the courage sewn into the words. Maybe it’s just me but:

‘It’s time to breathe an air that doesn’t choke.‘

Unless ‘choke’ is used after ‘I’ or ‘you’, I always feel it needs an object? I would never say ‘this air is choking’, it’d be ‘this air is choking me’. Of course, poetic license but I found this line a little disquieting. The use of ‘an’ before air seemed a bit forced to meet the syllable count too.

The last line too, already having ‘me’ as a subject of the sentence, would it not make more sense to say ‘a new identity for me is claimed’? Just a thought.

The rest of the sonnet I enjoyed immensely. A great piece, Michael!