All It Takes

by My Obsεssion   Nov 13, 2004


All it takes
Is one word
Your name
Like a river of knives
It pierces my ear
With razor-sharp waves
My ears bleed from the sound
Of it washing over them
This river of blades
Flowing straight to my heart

All it takes
Is one glance
Your face
Like the peaceful silence
Before the bomb explodes
Tears my heart apart
Ripping at the seams
Torn in two directions
Part of me wanting to remember
Another wanting to cut you out

All it takes
Is one memory
Your presence
Like the lingering drops of dew
Before they turn to frost
Memories once warm
Now turned icily frozen
Still bring a fleeting smile
A fading smile once warm
Now glazed over and cold

All it takes
Is one choice
Your action
Like a child begging
For the one thing they desire
Above all else
I’m kneeled at your feet
The gun to my head
But I can’t pull the trigger
Begging you to make this all stop

To release my tormented soul
From all the pain and suffering
You were my world, my everything
Now that you’re gone, my reality’s shattered
Help me out, don’t let me suffer anymore
I’m just a humanoid shell
That’s empty, that’s dead inside
Finish the job you started all too easily
Just pull the trigger for me
That’s all it takes…

**I didn't know whether this should stay under here or go under friendships, broken (it is about a friend I've lost). Anyone's opinion on that would help. Also this is the first free verse poem I've written in quite awhile and well it's not one of my favorites, but any constructive criticism to help is much appreciated**

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  • 19 years ago

    by Cantchangeme

    This poem is great, the describing words you use to describe the loss of this friend are just brilliant, as for it being free verse it really did flow brilliantly and it made it seem like it wasnt fee verse, excellent poem

    Love, Peace and Empathy

    Cantchangeme

  • 19 years ago

    by Andrea

    excellent poem! i really like it especially the pattern. it's very emotional and i was like glued to the screen as i reading it. hehe. great job!

  • 19 years ago

    by Johnny Marlin 2

    Excellent job, keep it up

  • 19 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Great poem, Erin. I think either category is equally good.

    As for it being free verse... I didn't really notice until I read your paragraph at the end... and that is the secret to making a good free verse poem... it flowed so well that it felt like it rhymed.

    I'm going to send some suggestions in a private message...

    Great work!!

    ~Ann