SaD LOSt GuRL

Pain , and just more pain .As it is said darkness is more profound then light.Anyways good work.

I really like this poem. It means so much to girls going throught their first heartbreak. It hurts so bad but it teaches you so much. Thanks for the comments. Never stop writting.
Hope

Deep and heartfelt. 5/5

The pain of love can be so traumatic.This is a very powerful piece emotion -wise, so sad with a touch of angst and futility in a tormented heart( although crys should be cries, a minor grammatical detail you may wish to change).The river of tears line is good and the last line has such an impact, 'forever and so long', a unique phrasing.So sad.Great job!

That was a f..kin good poem..sad,yea guys are fu..in stupid..n e way stay writeing and stay up..