That Girl

by Krete   Dec 19, 2004


Shes that Girl,
Yes Shes that One,
The Particular Whirl.
Everyones Fun.

The Girl Works,
She Works a Lot,
Like a Steel Toed Tear,
She Hurts on the Spot.

Her Life has Turned,
a 360 Degree Change,
Into the Role,
Of Stoic in Range.

What was in it for Her,
That Mother of Mine,
Why did She Work,
When She could have had wine.

Its an Eerie Thought,
The Deep Sad Sublime,
The Hidden Broken Tokens,
Of this Terrible Rhyme,

If Little Girls only Knew,
The True Portraits of Life,
Perhaps in Succession,
There Wouldn't Be Strife.

For Every Sore Baby Baring Woman,
One Tiny Little Soul they Bare,
A Child of which, Left to Be Ruined,
Whether by Possession or by Care.

I Wish I had a Daddie.
Then Maybe I Wouldn't Cry,
Than Maybe tonight,
I Wouldn't have Been Driven to Die.
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*I don't know.

*Tell me what you think.

*Lately all of my stuff has been sucking. I need some help.

*Thanks.

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  • 19 years ago

    by Luke

    i dont know man. i liked it. the off capitalization and grammar, along with your usual odd style of writing made for a good read. the last stanza seemed a little out of place, but not necisarrily in a bad way.

  • 19 years ago

    by Natalie84

    Brilliant...Just brilliant!! It does NOT suck!! Oh trust me....escpeacially not to a girl who has wished she had a daddy her whole life...Excellent--I am speechless....Keep it up and take care...Happy Holiays

  • 19 years ago

    by Gracie Jo

    Aww! This poem was sooo sad.. yet SO excellent! I must agree with Jen, your poem(s) do not suck! They're always so well written and coming straight from your heart - which makes any poem great! You have a gift, yes, that's for sure! =)

  • 19 years ago

    by Lushed

    what are you talking about!!!!??? this doesnt suck! its wonderful.

    i love how you make a wish at the end to close it. and this part:
    "If Little Girls only Knew,
    The True Portraits of Life,
    Perhaps in Succession,
    There Wouldn't Be Strife."

    is like another wish. its beautiful. i dont know how you could think it sucked!

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