WOW!WOW!WOW!!! This is the best poem I've read in a long time! WOW! I'm so stunned!! This is just so amazing! It has such a strong meaning and it flows so well! It is just beatiful! I'd give it a 100 if I could but ~5/5~ is still great! Keep up the great work!
Poor marks little body couldn't handle the drug taken overdose
for this line I think it would sound better if you leave out "drug taken"
Brains dad hit him
you mean Brian?
There where all ever so young
Their body's body's dead for people to find
Their young body's body's and minds forever lost
you have body's twice, unless you meant to do that idk...
anyways i read your post and you didn't just want a "good job" so here you go. but over all I really did think it was good=)
Wow, this poem made me cry... which I don't think that's ever happened, It's suc a sad poem and I think the thing that makes it sad is that it's true, stuff like that happens all the time, and more often it seems. I gave it a 5, only wish i could give it a 10..lol, I really loved reading this, I'm going to refer some friends to your poem... keep it up!
BRILLIANT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! amazing... that was perfect. u brought all real life issues into this poem and made it flow perfectly. this should be published to make people realize what is really happening in this world!
stay strong always and take care
Wow, this one really touched me hun, I have some young sibblings and I babysit for a lot of little kids, it is scary to think I could loose one of them . . . you wrote that very well, it made me cry. Great job hun.
This is really good in August the 19th of this year ;one of my friends killed him self than the monday wednesday and thursday and friday of that week I had four other friends kill themselves and scene school started one of my other friends died in operation and one hung himself and my cousin killed himself cuz his girlfriend for two years left him and my best friend who was always there for me told me he would never do anything like that cuz he saw how much it hurt me and three weeks after he told me that his little brother found him in his room with a gun in his hand and blood on the floor he killed himself he left me a letter and said he was sorry he had to take the cowards way out he said he would always be with me. it hurts to have almost all your friends kill themselves with in five months. it is the worst thing to have to deal with exspecially when it is your best friend. but all of your poems are really great.
9 years ago
This is such a sad poem which shows the happening of every hour.
What a wonderful poem......
Thanks for sharing