Last attempt at suicide..

by ♥CRIMSONxX♥   May 17, 2005


On the edge looking over
See the ground so far below
Stomach flips over a dozen times
Feeling so sick, not letting it show
Body trembling and shaking
Peering over a little more
Thinking about going back
Not jumping and hitting the floor
Wind blowing against pale skin
Life faded out from inside
Edge a little closer to the end
Letting out one last painful cry
Toes poking over and feet going further
This is it, there’s no turning around
On top of a 30 story building
Soon to be your dead body laying on the ground
You going to jump, this is the end
This is your last attempt at suicide
One, two, three, let go, but you don’t
Your not ready for your life to subside..

*I tried to see what it would be like from the perspective of someone about to jump and commit suicide, it isnt very good, but please comment and vote and let me know how i can improve..*

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  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    hun..this is brillient!!! you have captured the feeling so well...never try it yourself or i would die!!! great poem xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Renee

    this is a great poem...being a person who has attempted this, (not off a building), it explains it quite well...that feeling of wanting to go back but u feel ur to late. keep up the good work and thanks for the comment!
    much luv,
    renee

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