Comments : A funny little creature

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost Girl

    That is the weirdest poem ever, really great tho, but so CREEPY! stay strong
    xxxxxxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by BleedingAngel

    Ok that's what I call a DARK poem, that was really wierd....I got a wierd feeling inside now, it really got me to think....I wondered what you thought of when you wrote this and how you came up with the idea of writing like this??? Well done Katie, very intense....

    *Love Sabrina*

  • Lol sorry I thought that was quite funny. Freaky though. If I ever see one of those creatures I think I’ll squish it lol
    Interesting poem
    Well done
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    really creative poem! purple bullets? lol nice!

    ~PLP~ lil slam~

  • 18 years ago

    by Cara McTired

    ...wow

  • 18 years ago

    by Cara McTired

    i guess its always fun until someone gets hurt!

  • 18 years ago

    by otto

    i don't think i read a poem like this before, I liked the conculsion, I didn't really get it though, maybe write emotion, that people will relate, but then again I didn't get it, but Iliked the way you place some words together, keep exploring in your writting

  • 18 years ago

    by Ria

    Unique, very different and...want can I say!So strange!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by EoB

    wow...

    That was very strange...and creepy...
    What are you trying to tell us?

    Anyways...

    Good poem...EVery single line surprised me, and I wanted to read more and more...The end is very good, I think, and it makes the reader think..

    Among many more or ress forgetable poems, this one will be remembered...

    It flowed very well, and the rhyming scheme was nice...

    nice going!

  • 18 years ago

    by Amba

    Woooooooo that poem was F**king Buzy as shit, but yeah that is a very dark poem, very very good! buzy s**t like that makes me think! it was ur frend.. then it was ur enemy..
    5/5
    xox Bam

  • 18 years ago

    by Nici

    It was a change from the norm I'll give you that! I seemed a bit lost at first, but in a good way.

    Keep Writing
    Nici

  • 18 years ago

    by VampyraKi†

    that funny little poem
    was really quite sad
    that funny little poem
    was very well said

    sorry nice job very cool but sad way to die

  • 18 years ago

    by shakenangel

    woah... this is really good. I love the darker poems, it gives people a chance to really be imaginative. Very cool ending!
    5/5!
    xxxxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by sandra

    That was a very unique poem. I Loved it though. Keep it up! 5/5!
    -Sandra-

  • 18 years ago

    by midnight♥lullibys

    wow...thats....freaky.....very good 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie84

    OK well written but as I'm sure you've heard already, weird....to say the least…lol

    Reading it at first I was thinking what the hell...but by the second or third line I was all into it. You stuck me wanting to read more.

    I'm still wondering though if there was a special meaning or message behind it...or if you were just feeling a little funny? Hmmm...lol

    I loved the adventurous part of it and the anticipation of finding out what was next. What he would turn into and what he would do.

    Creative and funny...nicely done! :)

  • 18 years ago

    by ღ Christina ღ

    Excellent poem! 5

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha

    Awesome.

    I'll say it again because it's probably the only word in MY vocabulary to describe your poem.

    Awesome.

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha

    Oh yeah my only suggestion is to change "upon" to "on" because "upon" makes an unbalanced amount of syllables...It just throws the meter off.

  • 18 years ago

    by Mandy Lou

    Up until the last stanza I thought maybe this should be in the humor column not the "dark" one. A great write, kept it a secret til the end...5/5